Question: At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Band 8+ Sample Answer:
(Intro) It is true that the young generation accounts for a substantial proportion of the population in some countries, in comparison with the figure for older citizens. While this trend is disadvantageous in terms of lack of experience, I am of the opinion that the financial advantages are more significant.
(Body 1) On the one hand, the main reason why too many young people is unfavourable is due to lack of workplace experience. Senior citizens indisputably demonstrate a solid background of knowledge and skills through years of working. Without enough of these kinds of workers, companies might be affected enormously. Therefore if a company relies too much on a young labor workforce, work quality may not be guaranteed due to the dearth of industry-related experience and specific skill sets. In contrast, senior workers could ensure the standards within each company, for example satisfying the clients’ demands and boosting sales.
(Body 2) Despite the above arguments, I feel that a booming young population can be financially beneficial for both companies and wider society. Firstly, young adults are always willing to take on difficult tasks and even work around the clock to get the tasks done, which is not likely the case of the senior workforce who normally require extra fees for working overtime. Furthermore, young workers require a lower salary so by hiring a large number of junior workers, the company can save considerable expenditure. In addition a reduction in the number of the older people means that the total amount that governments have to pay for pensions would be substantially reduced. The money saved could then be invested in the construction of new schools and hospitals for the benefit of everyone.
(Conclusion) To conclude, some people may suggest that a younger population may create a lack of work-based experience, and therefore a reduction in work quality disadvantageous in some aspects. Nevertheless, I take the view that the economic gains for business and governments are more important. Therefore companies need to upgrade their training programs to close any experience and skills gaps. (335 words).
Essay: Student Essay, fully corrected and upgraded by Nick Kemp, former IELTS Examiner.
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